Peer Review and Revised Thesis

The peer review really helped me see my own QRG from another perspective and gather helpful advice to improve my first draft. The peers who read my QRG wrote really important questions and gave me some things to clarify to make sure the reader fully understands the topic. I also enjoyed seeing more developed and further along QRGs as examples of excellent writing and organization. These examples helped me see how to structure my own QRG and encouraged me to work on my own further.

Thesis: These standards, in fact, may have valiant and pure intentions, yet the effects are muddled by misrepresentation in the media, political agendas, and flaws in the public school system.

Revised Thesis: While some argue that Common Core math standards complicate the learning process and others claim it benefits the students, these standards, in fact, may have valiant and pure intentions, yet the effects are muddled by misrepresentation in the media, political agendas, and flaws in the public school system.

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