I commented on Arrick's and Kat's drafts.
I consulted my boyfriend on my essay draft to get another perspective on my writing and ideas. He really liked my essay as a whole but mentioned that sometimes my sentences went on a little long or were too wordy to the point it obstructed my argument. Also, he suggested I add a couple more examples of specific photos to support my points!
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