Student Essay Outline

Human sex-trafficking is a multi-billion dollar industry

-exploitation of individuals as commodity

-"Nefarious: Merchant of Souls"- documentary of sex trafficking insights

A)need to end human sex-trafficking by pathos

Uses emotions by showing images of victims being used and labeled as objects rather than humans

-dramatized reenactments to show dehumanization

A)shocks viewers with fashion shows

B)Metaphor of caged animals 

C)Shows hypocrisy to advocate for the end of trafficking

Appeals to emotions with commentary from clinical psychologist

A)gives insight on desperate nature

B) Victims being treated as animals again 

C)Forces viewers to focus on unnerving nature to make a difference

Uses cinematography effect to appeal to emotions

A)Rectangular frame fading, showing how victim retreats into themselves to escape the outside world

B)Creates the image that the viewer's own perspective is fading into invisibility

C) Places viewers in victims situation 

Image of narrowing circle as symbol for a tunnel

A)Mindset is like a tunnel lacking vision

B)Tool used to that hope is diminishing 

C)Fades to blackness to show the end of the light at the end of the tunnel

D)Heightened camera angle makes the viewer look down on the victim

E)Makes the viewer want to help the victim

Brazenness is the main effective strategy because it creates and emotional response

A)Provokes a desire to help victims 

B)Provides reasoning for a sense of action 

C) Shows that they are humans too (rehumanizes) 

I believe this essay is organized pretty well and adequately provides evidence for how the documentary uses pathos to deliver its message. Each topic sentence relates to the thesis and shows a different way the documentary uses emotional appeal to prove a point. I thought the paragraph on the tunnel was very well written and provides substantial insight on how different cinematography and metaphors affect the viewer. The evidence and conclusions were very strongly linked and the paragraph was organized logically with claims then evidence then link to thesis. On the other hand, the paragraph on the commentary with a clinical psychologist was weaker. The paragraph didn't really introduce any ideas that weren't stated in the previous paragraph (the metaphor of the victims with animals).Furthermore, the link to the thesis was very basic and already explained before.

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